There is a disagreement on the impact of increased business and culture contact between countries on a nation’s identity. What is your opinion ?

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are countries are moving cross countries for better opportunities. Many people
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national identity is being challenged by other nationalities migrating to their countries.
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following essay will shed light on my opinion in the conclusion. To start the deliberation, the main argument of native people is that, people coming over and resides in their country, brings along their own culture and sets of values, which is very different from national culture.
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, Asian people moving to Western countries do not
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own small communities like we can find China towns in almost
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majority groups living abroad.
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, people from different
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brings diversities in the society, presents
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ption for native people to learn more about their customs via
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can be achieved by visiting those countries. To conclude, I believe, the fear among people is somewhat true that having too many people from abroad will result in
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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