In the past, people used to travel abroad to look many differences from their home country. Nowadays, the sceneries in places all over the world are more and more similar. What are the causes of the similarities? Do you think the advantages of this similarity outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is undeniable that

people

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are quite passionate

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the different nations around the globe.

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, previously folks travelled to

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different countries in order to see

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different things rather than their own place, but these days everything looks the same in the whole world.

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essay will discuss the reasons behind

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similarities and

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my perspective,

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trend possesses some drawbacks which are outweighed

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its positive aspects.

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with, there are several factors which bring similar things in all the countries .

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, the advancement in modern technology makes it possible to share

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ideas all over, as the globe has become a global village, even the world of

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is so gigantic

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which individuals can exchange their viewpoints with each other and all

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happened

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modernization.

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, one nation could easily follow the sculptures,

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and, public buildings, so

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is the main reason, why countries have a similar scenic view.

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, in Auckland city of

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and Toronto city of Canada has a

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constructed building which is named

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CN Tower in Toronto and Sky Tower in Auckland, the only difference in their names.

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, globalization has made it possible to construct the same monuments.

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, the main disadvantages of the similarity are the lack of

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's interest and economic growth. If there

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the same construction of renowned places all around the nations ,

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people

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will certainly lose their interest

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in visiting

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these places and ultimately

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economic growth will be affected immensely.

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days

tourists

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is a booming industry which boosts the economy of the territory,

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the idea of similarity will

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towards

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negative implications. For

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, there have been some recorded instances of

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who only choose unique places to travel

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instead

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of similar ones.

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, the demerits are higher which could not be ignored.

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, it is true that there are no big differences among the nations around the world in terms of scenic beauty these days.

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essay discussed the pivotal reasons for the change and

also

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its enormous disadvantages.

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coherence cohesion

The essay provides a reasonable level of coherence and cohesion, with a logical structure and clear introduction and conclusion.

task response

The essay partially responds to the task by discussing the reasons for similarities in the world and the disadvantages outweighing the advantages. However, the support for main points and relevant specific examples is limited.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

356 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

globalization
urban planning
homogenous
social media
global culture
cultural diversity
multinational corporations
local identities
homesickness
global unity
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