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Many people around the world believe that completion is important, while others say it has its drawbacks. Do you think the positives of competition outweigh the negatives?

It is believed that any
contest
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, though necessary, has both pros and cons.
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, I think, the positivity of any
competition
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 outweighs the negativity of it. Usually, the prime purpose of any
contest
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 is to judge the contenders. Whether the
competition
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 is related to study, sports, crafts or anything else; it is the
contest
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 that brings out the beat of the participants. Sometimes, years of
practise
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 are related to it while participating in a competing event.
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, it helps people learn things in depth to take part in the
contest
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.
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, to take part in the Math Olympiad one has to practise and understand, mathematical rules thoroughly, which will, in turn, enhance their knowledge in mathematics.
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, most of the
competition
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 or tournament has now become commercial. For which, bigger tournaments are holding with the help of the sponsors like music, sports, culinary expertise and so on.
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,
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 awarded to the contestants is
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 related to the sponsorship. On top of that, it provides an employment opportunity for
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ifferent arena,
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, the event management as well.
On the other hand
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, rivalry leading to the heated argument and fighting is not an uncommon scenario in
competition
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. There were
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, these drawbacks are quite a few regarding the number of competitions going on every day and the myriad ways of positivity it provides. In conclusion, I think, though any
competition
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 might have some drawbacks, the positive impacts are far more to disregard those

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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