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In some countries, even though the rates of serious crimes are decreasing, people feel less safe than ever before. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

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Major crimes rates have been decreasing in some countries, but citizens feel more insecure than before. One of the main causes of
this
 issue are fake news and a possible solution to
this
 is to educate people to verify the
source
 of any
information
. Social networks are the main
source
 of fake news leading people to misinformation. Fake news
are
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 those contents that seem to be real but they only are created to confuse people and make them feel bad and sometimes scared. Many people receive a lot of
information
 about
any
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 subjects, but especially bad news.
This
 results in anger and outrage from citizens to the
government
 making them feel unprotected and fearful about their security.
For example
, in many Latin American countries, fakes news are in every social network dividing people's feelings and making them against the
government
, despite
those news
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 are not true. One of the ways the
government
 can reduce these feelings is by promoting massive campaigns to encourage people to verify the
source
 of any news that they see. Verifying the
source
 is something that people avoid to do because is very easy for them to share the
information
 without making
a
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previous research.
For example
,
a
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recent research of Harvard University found that in most of the non-developed countries, people tend to share fake news because they are not taught to verify
this
information
 before. In conclusion, to reduce citizens' insecurities despite crimes rates are decreasing, is necessary for the
government
 to promote the education of how they can verify the
information
 to know if it is fake or real.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • availability heuristic
  • media coverage
  • misinformation
  • urbanization
  • community cohesion
  • justice system
  • economic inequality
  • community policing
  • media literacy
  • surveillance
  • swift justice
  • social cohesion
  • neighborhood watch
  • deterrent
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