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Do you think businesses should hire employees who will spend their entire lives working for the company? Explain why do you agree or disagree. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#businesses #employees #lives #company #support
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, business is the most powerful way to earn money the but if the expert team or members lost their jobs
then
 its really difficult for
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usiness to remain
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ame
postion
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position
. Lots of employees lost their jobs even they spent
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ong time. Business must hire their old employees.
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 agree with
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 statement and
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explaining
 blow. To begins with, the world's
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biggest
 problem is going on is COVID-19, because of
this
 lots people
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 their jobs and businesses and some businesses are totally closed that would not be open in future but due to pandemic situation most of
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hings is
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under control
 and factories and
busniessess
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businesses
 opening
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again
 but
instead
 of
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their
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 old employees, they hire new ones. Old employees have
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 of
eperience
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experience
for instance
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 if any steel factory member working been soo long and he
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 to handle the bad situation. Where if any
company
 hire a new employee, they need a
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training
 and that thing sometimes
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aste of time.
Futuremore
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Furthermore
, if
buniess
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business
 is growing good day by day
that is
 because of their loyal employees. Loyal or old workers always work
effiecently
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efficiently
 and with perfection because they saw
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they
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company
 from up to rise and they always work in
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ompany like they living in their own house.
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team work
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 with full of perfection because they have
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expirence
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experience
. where new employees, sometimes they
wouldnot
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would not
wouldn't
 fit in a team and they fight with each
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ompany should hire back their employees because some people daily wage earner and its difficult for living.
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