These days, in some countries, an increasing number of young adults are choosing to spend their whole weekend inside their own homes. Why do you think this is happening? Is this a positive or negative development?

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modern society, a lot of young adults spend their whole weekend at
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onsequence of hard to get a
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, they do not want to spend their
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outside, and
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egative aspect.
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essay will discuss why they prefer to spend their
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at
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by themselves.
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, nowadays get a
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is more and more difficult than before. In recent research shows, more than half young people spend their free
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flourish themselves.
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, learn
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econd language or study
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get
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certifications. Because
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they want a
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or get
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etter
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than their original ones.
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, the people who spend their
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development
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them, they think
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spend
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and
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outside is wasting. They have to save
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cause of
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situations.
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, young adults do not want to make
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ew relationship. They think
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make a new relationship need a lot of
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and
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, many young adults do not want dating and get married. Because they do not have enough
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for that.
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,
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problem
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can leade to population problems, cause they do not want
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edding and get babies. In conclusion, I believe that
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contemporary society makes young adults stay at
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not their choice anymore. They cannot get a
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these days.
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, they do not want to go out naturally.
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, they do not want to make a new relationship. I think
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overnment have to do something
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these problems.
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is not personal problems.
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