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Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion

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illustrates
 the total leisure
time
 enjoyed by different sexes of different employment status In general, between 1988 to 1989, unemployed male enjoyed most free
time
 within a week closely followed by retired males. For women, both
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unemployed
employed
 and retired category almost enjoyed
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ame leisure
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, whereas employed people from both
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 were most busy. Categorically, for males, unemployed ones almost had 80 hours of free
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 within a week and that was nearly the same for retired males.
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, the employed people only had 40 hours of free
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 basis. Moving on to the other category, for females, 75 hours of free
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 had by unemployed and retired persons whereas the amount was a quarter less for housewives. The part-
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 employees had almost 40 hours of free
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 and that was five hours more than employed ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exemplify
  • perseverance
  • discipline
  • humble beginnings
  • motivate
  • inspire
  • teamwork
  • sportsmanship
  • negative behavior
  • drug abuse
  • unlawful activities
  • sensationalizes
  • unrealistic
  • unattainable standards
  • material success
  • skewed value system
  • high visibility
  • magnifies
  • faults
  • misleading
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