Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion

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were most busy. Categorically, for males, unemployed ones almost had 80 hours of free

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Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion

Fully explain your ideas

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