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People today change their jobs and even begin new careers more than ever before. This can cause difficulties for companies, as well as the individuals concerned. What challenges do they both encounter? What strategies are there to meet these challenges?

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Recent times has seen people changing careers for better prospects and sometimes in new fields.
This
 move,
however
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 employees for training and
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 employees who face challenges in their new roles. The main challenge that employers encounter would be monetary losses when the turnover rate for
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employment
unemployment
 is high. The company makes a loss on the training that it would have provided to the employee.
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, in Singapore Airlines, employees go through a training period of 3 months which totals up to $10000 Singapore dollars. The company would be incurring a loss if workers decide to change their employment after the training period.
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Furthermore
,
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 would be a disruption in work process
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 the company as a new employee would be required to fill the position. It would cost the organisation to train the new recruit and it takes up time
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 they are able to do so. The employee seeking a career change would
also
 have challenges ahead. They would have to consider the new working culture and adapting to the new environment.
Also
, if they are not adaptable to changes, it may be disruptive and stressful for them.
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