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Nowadays tourist are visiting one place to another places. However, people think that tourist should adopt the other cultureof country where they are visiting do you agree or disagree

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It has become the moot issue whether the globetrotters should embrace the
culture
 of the hosting country or they should only follow their native beliefs?
However
, distinct masses have distinctive mindsets. Certainly, I accord myself to
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arge extent to the
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assertion
 with the plausible favourable and unfavourable reasons which have shaped my opinion. To start the deliberation, there are
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myriad
 of things that can be favoured the statement. The tenable aetiology is traveller visit
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every part of the world to explore the unfamiliar
culture
, traditions, sightseeing and to grab the knowledge. There is famous quote " when in roman, do like
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" it will help tourists to blend with local residents in order to learn their traditions, cultural beliefs
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therefore
, they will get enormous support and respect from the local people.
For Instance
, pilgrims going every year for Hajj the sacred city of
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mecca
Macca
 in Saudi Arabia. Throughout Holiplace you are expected to remove signs of wealth or class distinctions by replacing your clothing with simple white garments. These pieces are called 'ihram clothing.
Furthermore
, when holidaymaker
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 with
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elcoming community with ease,
then
 they would not face difficulties while
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visiting
 one place to another.
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, local provincial can guide them when they speak their language and regards their values, food. Eventually, their trip
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 worthwhile when they have been welcomed by open arms.
On the other hand
, despite having things in the favour of adopting
culture
 by
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explorers
however
, there are few things which cannot be possible for
sightseeker
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sight seeker
 to espouse. To exemplify, there are some indigenous tribes in Africa, they have their own dynamic
culture
 values which is quite
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mind- boggling
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 for
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 to follow the same
such
 as , their eating habits, dressing style and piercing the various part of the body especially ears. Bone ,horn, wood, and stone were generally carved for ear stretching.
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 take on local
culture
 would make them uncomfortable
subsequently
 it is always not a favourable idea to acquiring the customs and rituals of hosting country. To recapitulate,
Culture
imersion
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immersion
 would definitely help visitors in so many ways. Native people adore the
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 who
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 like residents, they guide them, assist them in unfamiliar circumstances or places.
Similarly
, when
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sight seeker
 get along with locals their trip
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assle, cheerful and they will get the chance to know the inhabitants very closely. Apparently, there are some uncomfortable situations where globetrotters would not feel comfortable
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ommunity to feel them better irrespective of knowing the language barrier or other discomforts.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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