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Schools should not force children to Learn foreign language. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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I argue that Junior to learn a foreign
language
 due to more benefits in the future.In my perspective,
i
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 firmly agree with
this
 statement but Children are not forced to do it and which will be highlighted in the upcoming paragraph. On the one hand, certain beneficial to learn foreign
language
 considerably. The
first
 and foremost reason is that student Can do learn Overseas
language
 after that, it is more beneficial in the future. whilst, they help to gain your knowledge as well as it will be helpful for a finding any type of job in the future.
Secondly
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Children can know about the alien culture and tradition.
Therefore
, the educator should be taught for the student to
f
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oreign
language
 than they can the result for the better at
school
.At
last
, student cam know about the various offshore nations.
On the other hand
, certain drawbacks encourage foreign
language
.Primarily,parents and teacher do not force to learn Foreign
language
 because some students do not interested in
this
 field and it is not any benefits for students. Secondarily,
school
 teacher Should be learnt to shoot subject rather than foreign
language
 for students.
Moreover
,the
school
 result is the batter at that time. Students do not learn natural ability due to stressful and peer pressure. At the result, they can do not achieve their goal in life. To conclude,
although
 it can be said that
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overnment should foreign
language
 subjects are not compulsory in
school
 as an optional subject in the
school
.
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