In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In countries like Britain, old people stay in old
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overnment should be the one to pay the bills without relying on help from the families of old people.
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of all, old parents should not be required to depend on their younger children for their daily survival. In some cases, their offspring’s may even neglect their moral obligations and responsibilities to take care of
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parents. With no help from their children, many old people will struggle to make both ends meet with no steady source of income. To illustrate,
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urvey conducted by "Times magazine" reported that more than 60% of children do not provide for their parents in old
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old people who do not have children who rely solely on
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overnment for their expenses.
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, without any financial assistance from
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the old people will not be able to survive on their own.
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should be required to pay for the expenses as old people have paid the taxes for their whole life.
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, the taxes from
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ublic should be enough to cover the basic requirements of shelter, food and medicine for
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old people. Many old people suffer from
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ariety of health complications like memory loss, knee pain, shoulder pain etc. which makes working extremely hard due to which they should not be expected to work full time in their late years. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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overnment should pay for the expenses of old
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homes. The family might not have intentions or means to pay for the bills but
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overnment can depend on the taxes from
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ublic to make sure that old people live comfortably in old
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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