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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society.To what extent do you agree or disagree with the following statement

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In today's digital age most of the people surrounding by various types of publication not only in mass media
such
 as TV or newspaper but
also
 in social media ads.These methods are mainly unethical for individuals and most of them using their personal data.
To begin
 with,many advertising agencies uses private information
such
 as collecting their data without permission.Cookies collect our browser history and use for its website which promotes PPC(per pay click) policy.
This
 cause to get back website which person already looking for
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roduct in the past.But we can't ignore that some companies have a
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privacy
 policy and they already ask for authorization to use their info.Another type of immoral technique used to
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romotional
product
 with help of technology is mail advertisement.Nowadays most of the people spam full with a lot of junk mail which is provided by selling their mails for companies.
On the other hand
, it has been common in today's advertising when enterprises advertise their
product
, they make an advert containing harmful psychological content.
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rand mainly used by youngster
such
 as energy drink,cigarette advertises by pornographic style.
This
 makes them addictive for
this
product
 and mainly most of the
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damage
image
 their physical and mental health without awareness of using .Another feature that can be seen in
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 advertisement made by
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ashion and beauty sector.They try to introduce beauty standards
such
 as zero models,face in gold shape which is why most of the omen, especially among 18-30 ages,among 18-30 ages end up in physicological conditions
such
 as Anorexia Nervosa or depression for their body. To conclude,it is obvious that today's advertisement is mainly about state of mind and if
this
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 in
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accurate
 way it can't make a huge impact on humans.
Hence
, it should be the
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government's
 responsibility to prevent
this
 condition by giving a strict rule of
this
 kind of activities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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