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Some people think that teacher should be responsible for teaching student judge. What is right,what is wrong so that they can behaviour. Other say that teacher should only teach academic subject. Discuss both views give your opinion.

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 issue that,a few people think that coach should be a
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, in my perspective that former out weight the latter and which will be highlighted in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand,certain benefits of teacher responsibility are undeniable.
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,practical work as well as games.
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,schoolteacher should behave more effect on their student lives.
On the other hand
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 can focus on
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raduate can help to achieve the goals in their life. To summarise, it can be said that
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