Some people believe that it is possible for a country to be economically successful and have a clean environment. Others argue that these two aims are not compatible. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Many today are increasing the opinion that countries can be economically successful and have a clean
environment
.
However
, other
part
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of people reckon that it is not compatible.
This
essay will analyse both points of view and I give my own opinion.
Firstly
, countries, who are developing their economic power, think only about how to make money and at the same time do not worry about the
environment
. Unfortunately, huge factories, deforestation and oil production are the reality of our days. Governments predominantly of poor states
forgets
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about nature,
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the pure air, water and soil do not make a profit. On the one hand, people who are looking
in
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the future, believe that
the
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great economy can be compatible with a clean
environment
. If
countries
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leaders thought,
how
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to
reducing
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pollution,
using
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more electric vehicles and
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waste,
as a result
, their states would be economically independent and environmentally friendly. I personally think that becoming economically sound and having a pure
environment
at the same time is
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, as one leads to the other.
For example
, Switzerland, as we know, is a rich country that has no rubbish, because they have an extremely good waste
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system and
this
country already wants to buy the waste from others.
Also
, at Swiss schools children have been studying how to sort garbage for 8 types.
To conclude
,
although
it is quite difficult to invest in
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cleanliness and in the economic sector, if we educate our children and support them in creating pollution-free surroundings,
then
the nation can easily become economically successful and have clean surroundings at the same time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • environmental sustainability
  • policies
  • technology
  • commitment
  • green technology
  • renewable energy sources
  • carbon emissions
  • pollution
  • industrial development
  • production
  • consumption
  • depletion of natural resources
  • loss of biodiversity
  • unsustainable
  • consumption patterns
  • sustainable development
  • technological innovation
  • global cooperation
  • circular economy
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