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In today's competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents to go out to work. While some say that the children in these families benefit from an additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents' absence. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many
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 that it is ideal for families financial situation for having both parents to earn, while
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 that parents absence can have
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egative affect on their offsprings.
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To begin
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 their parents in their developing years. It is very essential for kids to bond their parents and develop a bond. Children learn from their parents, absentee parents can leave a void in their offspring's life.
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ouple who care more about their careers rather than their kids
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 fails to develop a bond with them. So, when parents get older, their kids do not feel the connection with them,
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their parents in the retirement age.
On the other hand
, for parents to provide their child, able to buy things in need can be present a challenge in
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 up jobs for their families better lifestyle.
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 in
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ost of living in many developing countries, it is not possible for one person to able to afford a sustainable living for the family. To conclude, in my opinion,
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etter lifestyle for their children but it can not compensate the care and attention of a parent's love
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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