Nowadays, people spending more time away from their homes because they spend longer in their workplace. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

As compared to the times bygone,
one
, today,
lives
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a larger proportion of a day in the office and a smaller duration of it at home. Indeed,
this
changed
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trend is simultaneously advantageous and disadvantageous as discussed ahead. Merits
first
!
One
obvious benefit that a person can draw out of staying longer at the workplace is that there can be a reduced incidence of scuffles and arguments. The lesser the family members are together, the lesser they are going to find
time
to argue or fight,
thus
leading to a chaos-free life. Another positive aspect of
one
's staying away from home and its members for longer is that their value increases for
one
. It is a human tendency to devalue what and who are always there. When
one
gets less
time
to spend with
one
's family, its value for
one
approaches the pinnacle. But the negatives are no smaller in magnitude. While with distance
one
craves family
time
,
this
longevous lacuna between
one
and
one
's family can
also
lead to a damaging distance between them.
This
distance,
then
, manifests in the forms of reduction in love,
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eneration gap and incognizance regarding family matters. Adding to
this
can be the equally dreadful discontinuity of health food and exercise. With more
time
at work, people do not get
time
to take note of what they eat and what they move. A sedentary lifestyle with unwholesome food practices combined with a less-than-required sleep duration leads to a body of decreased efficiency and depreciated health. Conspicuously, neither is what
one
works for. Encapsulating the whole,
this
can be stated that longer workplace regimens do proffer some emotional advantages, but their physical and familial demerits are no less potent.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career progression
  • earning potential
  • enhanced productivity
  • skill sets
  • work-life balance
  • personal well-being
  • negatively impacting
  • increased stress
  • health issues
  • burnout
  • cardiovascular diseases
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