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In many cities, the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom.

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The use of
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camera
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 is very popular in many majors major cities around the world because of their function in preventing crime .
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 some people hold the view that
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 method restricts their privacy, in my point of view, the benefits of increasing surveillance cameras do outweigh the drawbacks.
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 with, I regard the disadvantage of
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 installation as invading people’s individual personal freedom. It is uncomfortable for them to have all their movements and images of their faces will be recorded. Paradoxically, I believe that it is necessary to fit up
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amera in public places to ensure
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 safety .
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, they greatly contribute to crime reduction by not only deterring crimes and thieves but
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 helping in investigating their whereabouts .
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, according to the figure in a 2019 survey , the number of crimes and thieves remarkably decreased in comparison with the same period
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 year .Equally important ,
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 cameras assist the police in their enquiries as crime detection. As many sources of information, via CCTV
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 , a dangerous serial murder was found by the police
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 month and they successfully solved the large-scale bank robbery .
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 but not least , psychologically speaking , the beneficial effects of
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 cameras do weaken the will to sin in the mind of man .
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 , the government can more easily maintain law and order in their nation . In conclusion , albeit using
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 in society is opposed , I still encourage CCTV
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 installation due to a safer life.
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