Nowadays, most countries improve the standard of living through economic development. But some social values are lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of the phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent times,
although
living conditions are developing owing to economic growth in many countries, as a consequence, some kind of ethical values are slipped away in society. In my opinion, the benefits of
this
event absolutely outweigh the drawbacks. The progress in
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conomy has been the most effective key for improving living standards almost all over the world. If any country has
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owerful and stabilized
economy
, the society experiences
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life, which is the reason to be
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elight and comfortable. The people who have a high quality of life are
also
influencing the strength of the
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market, which is playing the major role in economic growth and development of the society as well as the state.
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that people lived in high conditions is more willing to carry out their duties and
also
influences around them,
as a result
, the quality of work and as well as
economy
escalates. As opposed the economic improvement causes to disappear of main social principles
such
as trust, justice and honesty and etc. The reason is that the government control over the companies, which are the main tools for progress in
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conomy decreases due to
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economic fields,
thus
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some companies begin to use illegal activities to increase the income.
However
, it is regulable because of the states could prepare suitable legislation and practice to control industry and companies. The protection of social values is
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ight way and social welfare.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • economic development
  • social values
  • materialism
  • community welfare
  • sustainable technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • social stratification
  • social cohesion
  • economic status
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