You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am a resident student at Joanna Briggs

Institiute

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of Technology, and a penchant visitor of our college cafeteria. I believe that for the less affluent students like me,

cafeteria

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provides a

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meal at a reasonable price.

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, some of the options, especially the

meat balls

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are a delicacy, which can give any restaurant in town a run for their money.

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, recently the food options have become very

repeatitive

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repetitive

and quality of food has dropped over time. Concurrently, it lacks the option to suggest menu's, limiting us to a pre-selected list. I would suggest

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a poll on

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website with options the cafeteria can cook every month, where students can vote, addressing the issue of choice for students and cooking limitation of the college. Looking forward to

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positive action from you. Thanks and regards, Nash Whitefield.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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