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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am a resident student at Joanna Briggs
Institiute
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Institute
 of Technology, and a penchant visitor of our college cafeteria. I believe that for the less affluent students like me,
cafeteria
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 provides a
well balanced
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 meal at a reasonable price.
Also
, some of the options, especially the
meat balls
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 are a delicacy, which can give any restaurant in town a run for their money.
However
, recently the food options have become very
repeatitive
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repetitive
 and quality of food has dropped over time. Concurrently, it lacks the option to suggest menu's, limiting us to a pre-selected list. I would suggest
to publish
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 a poll on
college
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the college
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 website with options the cafeteria can cook every month, where students can vote, addressing the issue of choice for students and cooking limitation of the college. Looking forward to
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positive action from you. Thanks and regards, Nash Whitefield.
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