Modern cultures around the world have become similar when compared to the past. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

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A tradition represents the value and richness of a particular ethnicity and in
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regard, an overwhelming majority of traditions, in
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contemporary era, across the globe have become immensely identical.
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there are a plethora of factors behind
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trend, some of the paramount causes leading to
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condition are globalization and the ever-increasing innovation in technology. I personally concur
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undoubtedly an optimistic growth.
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with, of late, many
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around the world are
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virtually than
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previous decades owing to better
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, jobs, manufacturing, expansion of businesses, and so on. These factors facilitate residents to move between various
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and
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either get influenced by the host country's
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or influence
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with their intrinsic culture.
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way, there is a substantial exchange of cultures between two or more countries and gradually
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, as
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are heavily reliant on modern sophisticated technology
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as smartphones and tablets, they are able to communicate effectively with
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from other countries, and
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aids both
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parties
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common
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. Canada,
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, has
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from various
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and every citizen of the nation follows a common culture
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practical and convenient owing to a mix of
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from various races.
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practice has never faced a backlash from
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across the globe, and the central reason behind
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is twofold,
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, interchanging
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customs
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would make
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harmonious than before and
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down or
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the possibility of conflicts between
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to
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almost non-existent.
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, assimilating other
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would aid professionals and businessmen to have flourishing careers with no boundaries.
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, it is apparent that the adaptation of other cultures has always been a fruitful development. India,
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, being a culturally diverse nation follows common
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as keeping fast, celebrating well-renowned festivals like Diwali, and so on. These
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unify the country and encourage unity among its citizens.
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, it is blatant that
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throughout the world
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become much
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and common than they were centuries or decades ago. As more and more
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travel to various
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for better employment or businesses setting up establishments, there is always a mix of culture between both the parties and ultimately
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up with
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following common
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in both
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traditions happily.
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way, a prodigious amount of cultures,
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were unique long back are now mixed well. I find
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to be exceedingly beneficial, as it unties many
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around the world and alleviates the possibilities of any potential conflicts.
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