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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent decades, ever since the technology revolution, the way of exchanging information
is
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has
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also
 changed in many ways. In fact, nowadays,
instead
 of
writting
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writing
 a
letter
 individuals prefer to write an email.
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 of
communiction
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communication
 has changed, because of the telecommunication advancement in the entire world. In the olden
days
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days,
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people
 used to send letters via post which used to take
longer
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a longer
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time
for
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to
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delivaring
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delivering
 and getting back its response.
Due to
 an internet
facility
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facility,
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 it
becomes
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has become
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 so handy that
people
 started sending messages in
fraction
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a fraction
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 of
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a seconds
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seconds
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 by email, whats app and many social media platforms. To exemplify,
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the letter
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letter
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letters
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 could not be preserved for
longer
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a longer
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 period of
time
,
whereas
,o emails, text messages,
photos
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and photos
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, shared by anyone could be saved in
gmail
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Gmail
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 or in cloud servers for years together and available in just one click when you want to refer it. Because
of
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apply
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global warming is becoming
burning
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a burning
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 issue for many countries,
world
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 is going towards paperless transactions, and by doing
this
 indirectly it would save our environment.
As many
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 woods are destroyed to meet the demand
of
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for
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 paper every year. Many
corporates
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corporations
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 are going for
paperless
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a paperless
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 culture to save the
enviorment
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environment
. Being
reponsible
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responsible
human
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humans
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, should avoid
use
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the use
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 of paper.
For instance
, if
people
 use digital media to send
letter
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letters
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,
instead
 of
traditional
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the traditional
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 way of sending
letter
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letters
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, it would reach quickly and help to save our
enviorment
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environment
 too.
On the other hand
, many critics argue, that
writting
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writing
letter
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letters
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 has more weightage and importance, as they
corelate
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correlate
relate
with emotions at the same
time
 many
people
 are not very friendly with new technology and find it convenient to write letters. find it more
convient
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convenient
.
To conclude
, as many emotions are attached
with
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to
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 sending
letter
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a letter
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 in
olden
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the olden
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 days, but in
this
 contemporary
life
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life,
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people
 have to take advantage of the new technology which
save
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saves
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time
 and
environment
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the environment
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 too.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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