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Today large shopping malls and super markets are more common than small local shops. is this a negative or positive development?

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Nowadays, small shops have been becoming less popular due to the increase in
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umber of supermarkets and shopping malls.
Mmodem
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Modern
Modem
 trend of shopping is definitely a positive development as
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uyer cannot only save
time
 by shopping from one place but
also
 cost-effective as well as (and) easily reachable (approachable, commutable).
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First
 and foremost, superstores (markets) and large shopping plazas helping (
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) people to save
time
 during shopping. To clarify, when an individual visits different local shops to buy essential products
then
 it takes
time
 because
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uyer has to travel to several places as it is not possible for small sellers to keep everything in their stores whereas,
on the other hand
, supermarket provides facilities to shop all essential products under the same roof.
For example
, an article published in 2019, in The Daily News, America, stated that 90% of Americans prefer to shop from big stores as it saves of the
time
.
Further
, transportation is always a major concern during shopping. To elaborate, it is an
ardous
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arduous
 task to visit different shops (in) at different locations to complete their shopping whereas (while), the trains and bus stations are easily available near shopping
centers
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 to make shopping easy.
For example
 (instance), in Sydney, Australia, there is at least one tram station near every central business district.
In addition
, cost
also
 plays a vital role in every aspect of life. To explain, as supermarkets and other huge shopping stores have more items in stock due to which their prices are comparatively less than local shop keepers which
favours
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 buyers to save a massive amount of money.
For example
, a survey conducted by trade organization of Pakistan in 2018, on 500 people/local buyers revealed that prices of products in local retailers shops are 40% higher as compared to the supermarket prices. In conclusion, it can be concluded that
although
 the development of big shopping
centers
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 and other supermarkets have replaced a number of local shops, which is
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 positive development because it has made the life easy in terms of not only saving
time
 and money but
also
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