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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps illustrate changes in how to access
to
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a city hospital in the
year
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 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, there was a significant improvement in
road
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 infrastructure in front of the hospital.
Besides
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, more parking space was available after
three
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 years of reconstruction. Looking into details, there was the appearance of two roundabouts at the two intersections of Hospital
Road
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 after being constructed. The
three
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 bus stops situated on the left of Hospital
Road
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2007 were demolished to make way for a spacious bus station connecting to the roundabouts. The other
three
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 bus stops to the right of the
road
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 were
also
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 removed completely. Before the construction, the car park at the corner of City
Road
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 and Hospital
Road
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 was used for both the staff and the public.
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,
three
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 years later, it was separated and only used for the employees, leading to the erection of another parking area for the public located to the east of the hospital.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, three with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic flow
  • road access
  • ring road
  • bus stops
  • bus station
  • congestion
  • parking facilities
  • pedestrian crossings
  • vehicular flow
  • organizational structure
  • accessibility
  • enhancements
  • configuration
  • dedicated
  • diverting traffic
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