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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree?

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In England and Australia, the tribunal is not given the past criminal history of the accused. Some lawyers believe that having access to all the previous records of the defendant helps the judges to return accurate verdicts. In my opinion, I completely agree that the jury ought to be aware of the history of the accused as it will greatly benefit both the board and the defendant. A good reason to change the practising is that it avoids the bench to make any prejudiced decisions.The Previous past of the accused helps in deciding the severity of the retributions. Repeat offenders like serial murderers or rapist,
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should receive stringent punishments whereas someone who commits misdeeds under the influence of unfavourable circumstances should be treated more lenient.
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, having a 360-degree view of the defendant as a whole would lead the board delivering a fair verdict or stance.
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 advantage, if the past records are taken into consideration as they will not be misjudged.
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, a girl may commit murder owing to protect herself from being raped.
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, the clean history of the girl can save her from harsh sentences either custodial punishment like life imprisonment or capital punishment.
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, the previous past gives insight into the criminal's social background, upbringing,education, character and health status.
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, the board can read the mind of the convicted and take a well defined, appropriate and conscious decision. In conclusion, the tribunal must be made aware of the comprehensive past records of the accused, which led to the judgement without flaws.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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