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Some people feel that exams are a good way of accessing the students .Other people feel that they put stress on the young learners and tell us very little about the students' abilities. Discuss both the views and tell us your opinion

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Examinations were introduced into the education system as early as the 1700s and have since
then
 been considered the gold standard of assessment.
This
 system stands by the mindset of providing an equal chance to
then
further
 segregate the individual into various occupations.
For example
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the ones scoring high in math would take up accounting jobs or bank jobs , ones good at social studies would get into journalism or law. To sum it up an individual could choose his career based on his aptitude in the subjects resulting in a balanced economy.
On the contrary
 , careers must be chosen by the individual himself and must not be subjected to the results of an examination. A closed examination ,a variable of books and memorization must not be the decision-maker of a person’s life.
For example
, The hierarchy of a boy scoring poorly in math boards does not give a verdict of him being bad at stock brooking or business . Mistakes or predictions of mistakes in career options should not be a pillar that stands for
such
 evaluations.
Thus
 , in my opinion, examinations though argue to encompass the ability to assess a man’s goals should not be given that authority. Written tests not only curb an individual's interests they
also
 arrive with an impacting blow to his/her self confidence .
For example
 , if all the animals in a forest
such
 as tigers, lions, fishes, giraffes, bears and monkeys were to be given a task of climbing a tree , the results are obvious . The incapability of the fish to climb a tree can never discount the ability of it to swim .
Thus
, in conclusion, I strongly believe that a revolution in schooling and college systems is quite necessary for the virtue of healthier people and healthier minds.
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