Some say that when a person achieves success in their job, it means that he/she is selfish and doesn’t care about others. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that a person becomes self-centred after getting triumph in his career and

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leads to making him irresponsible towards others. I strongly disagree with

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notion and will discuss my arguments with various examples.

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with, to be successful in life one has to do sacrifices. They should be determined, hardworking and focused towards their ambition. And, to achieve the goal, individual will only think about the ways to get there and in

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phase sometimes they have stayed to away from family and friends. They have to go to universities which will enhance their skills and step ahead.

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, these places provide them with placements in big companies.

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, many students migrate to other countries to get better jobs and to make a better living for their own and for their family. They are working and helping their families back home financially.

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, one wants to be successful in his field, in order to help others. They want to have a status in the society.

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– Ratan Tata an Indian Business Man, who is a very famous personality, runs many companies of his own. In order to provide employment to people, he has opened new companies in every sector like TATA Communications, transport, steel, textiles and so on.

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, recently he has donated a huge amount of his savings to Indian National Fund to help people in

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pandemic situation. To sum up, I believe if a person wants to be successful he has to think for himself

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and

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only he can make his family stable and fulfil the needs. And in

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process , one needs to do sacrifices and people think it is selfish.

minhas.jaspreet333Tue Oct 06 2020

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