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School should not force students to study a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#school #force #students #study #language
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Concerning the issue of approaching a new
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 towards students, people hold different views. An army of people reckons that students do not need to learn an oversea
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 from their school. From my perspective, I partly agree with
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 statement for many convincing reasons. It is undeniable that children will progress in
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ore comprehensive way if they can study their favourite subjects.
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, learning
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oreign
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 depends on the demand of each person. To details, students are encouraged that they should learn necessary subjects which
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 for their future career.
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, it is clearly seen that accessing a new
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 which just every single one’s interests and should not be too compulsory to learn it.
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, we saw the globalization increasingly, so catch up
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 trend, learning
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 plays
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 vital part in our life.
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, mastering a
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 will be a strong point to help us become more confident in
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 with people around the world.
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 many benefits to us in looking for
a stable and well-paid jobs
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 in the future via the use of foreign
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 proficiency. In summary, for the reasons mentioned above, it can be affirmed that discovering oversea
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 is due to individual hobbies.
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, it is highly recommended that people
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 invest the time to find out new
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 if they want to
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 more chances to promote in their
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