In some countries, citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

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Nowadays a lot of people in the world they don’t have to pay taxes but in other hand schools and hospitals are not free.

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, taxpayers always have opportunity to Access free scholarship,

healthcare

, and

also

help the country develop faster, In my opinion

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the advantages are more because scholarship and medical care are essential for citizens, no matter how much we pay in taxes

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if we have these essential factors for free.

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ree scholarship can be successful for those who do not have

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alary to pay, the poor people can study and have university degree without paying anything,

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, my aunt

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alary to pay my cousin’s school, but in her country the education is free, she just has to work to pay the taxes, so

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example can show us that the free education is very helpful for those people that

doesn’t

have enough money .

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, In the world everyone needs

healthcare

, in some countries is free so is very helpful for those people that

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have money to pay , if you get sick you can go to the hospital without paying anything

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because the

healthcare

is very expensive in those countries that have to pay,

for example

, my cousin got sick and they were worry because maybe they have to pay too much, but my aunt she is paying the taxes so she

doesn’t

have to pay anything for the

healthcare

, everything was free,

this

type of situation is very helpful when you have your

healthcare

free because you won't have to run to get money to pay and you can go whenever you want to the hospital. In conclusion, I feel strongly that the advantages are more because is very important the educación and the

healthcare

in our lives and if is free is very essential.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Equitable access
Public health
Literacy rates
Social inequalities
Government accountability
Standard of living
Financial burden
Taxpayers
Government inefficiency
Quality of services
Competition
Personal responsibility
Self-reliance
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In some countries, citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

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