In some countries, citizens must pay a lot of money in taxes, but education and healthcare are free. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantage?

Nowadays a lot of people in the world they don’t have to pay taxes but in other hand schools and hospitals are not free.
However
, taxpayers always have opportunity to Access free scholarship,
healthcare
, and
also
help the country develop faster, In my opinion
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the advantages are more because scholarship and medical care are essential for citizens, no matter how much we pay in taxes
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if we have these essential factors for free.
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ree scholarship can be successful for those who do not have
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alary to pay, the poor people can study and have university degree without paying anything,
for example
, my aunt
doesn’t
have
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alary to pay my cousin’s school, but in her country the education is free, she just has to work to pay the taxes, so
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example can show us that the free education is very helpful for those people that
doesn’t
have enough money .
Secondly
, In the world everyone needs
healthcare
, in some countries is free so is very helpful for those people that
doesn’t
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have money to pay , if you get sick you can go to the hospital without paying anything
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because the
healthcare
is very expensive in those countries that have to pay,
for example
, my cousin got sick and they were worry because maybe they have to pay too much, but my aunt she is paying the taxes so she
doesn’t
have to pay anything for the
healthcare
, everything was free,
this
type of situation is very helpful when you have your
healthcare
free because you won't have to run to get money to pay and you can go whenever you want to the hospital. In conclusion, I feel strongly that the advantages are more because is very important the educación and the
healthcare
in our lives and if is free is very essential.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Equitable access
  • Public health
  • Literacy rates
  • Social inequalities
  • Government accountability
  • Standard of living
  • Financial burden
  • Taxpayers
  • Government inefficiency
  • Quality of services
  • Competition
  • Personal responsibility
  • Self-reliance
  • Overreliance
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