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In recent years, there has been a growing interest in the relationship between equality and personal achievements. Some people believe that individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having such a society? Discuss both views, and give your views.

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According to the Ecological Systems Theory, the environment that a person lives in has the most significant influence on his/her personal development. Some argue that certain personal traits are closely associated with a person’s achievement.
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equality
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 is the key to an individual’s success in general from two aspects: gender
equality
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 and education
equality
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. The roles that women play in societies often vary significantly among different regions of the world. Societies, that offer women more freedom in terms of educational and vocational choices, could possess more desirable opportunities to facilitate women in pursuing their dreams and achieving their potentials. Women in Australia,
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, where the
equality
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 between males and females is considerably advance, could be more likely to achieve higher personal successes than women in Pakistan where females often remain inferior than males in
society
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. Education
equality
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 is another effect that could largely influence on one’s accomplishment. As human
society
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 develops, the ability of literacy and the access to modern technologies become increasingly important in individuals’ personal development. Residents of regions where free fundamental education and better access to technologies,
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 as the internet and computers, are provided, could have increasing numbers of opportunities to exercise their personal traits,
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, to succeed in the fields of their choices. To conclude, an egalitarian
society
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 can facilitate more achievements among individuals. The gender and education equalities are two fundamental ones that could ensure everyone in the
society
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, both males and females, to have the relatively equal opportunity to succeed.
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