IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

In the past, the role of teacher was to provide information. Today students have access to wide sources of information. There is , therefore, no role of teachers modern education. Do you agree or disagree?

#role #teacher #information #students #access #sources #teachers #education
The phenomenon that schooling is only longer necessary since more and more
information
 is accessible
such
 as on the internet.
However
, I do believe that the role of
t
Add an article
the
a
show examples
eacher is still essential in modern education. One very strong argument is that
knowledge
 of teachers is more authoritative. It is true that students could obtain
knowledge
 from other sources
such
 as
i
Add an article
the
show examples
nternet.
However
, since everyone can post on websites and forums, it may be difficult for students to tell the difference between right and wrong when they encounter contradictory opinions.
Therefore
, teachers are still necessary as a source of
information
 as they have gained professional
knowledge
 in advance. It can be too often restated that teachers know how to teach students in a suitable way. Probably the most obvious point to make is that many students find it difficult when they begin to learn a new subject since they may never hear of it before. The fact
that is
 that teachers will have an integrated plan of a subject and begin their teaching from basic points to lower its difficulty for beginners.
Therefore
,
following
Verify preposition usage
apply
show examples
teachers who are potent to guide students to learn in a systematic way is more effective and efficient than other sources of
information
. Another rationale is that students can improve their practical skill with the help of teachers.
For example
,some subjects
such
 as chemistry and physics, students need to do some experiments in order to deepen the understanding of phenomena. If teaching goes through without experienced teachers, students may face danger since they just know the process of experiments theoretically but do not have practical experience.
For example
, chemical explosions may happen if students wrongly put some materials together. To
concluded
Change the form of the verb
conclude
show examples
, under
this
 line of thinking, teachers still function as a crucial source of
information
, considering their authoritative
knowledge
, systematic ways of teaching and practical skills.
Submitted by tina fung on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: