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Some people think that there should be some restrict controls about noise. Others think that they could just make us much noise as they could just make us much noise as they want. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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People have a myriad of views about whether we should have the freedom to produce
noise
 or comply with some regulations of it. In my views, it is important that
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 should be put under control. Among the reasons why some people believe in their rights to generate
noise
 freely, probably the most obvious one is that people these days have to suffer from considerable stress at work or school. The fact that they tend to find an effective way to relieve it. It is a ubiquitous phenomenon that recreational activities
such
 as karaoke singing or party holding can bring a certain amount of relaxation, mitigating stressful situations for everyone. What is
also
 worthy of our attention is that if too strictly imposed, any restriction of
noise
 may
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 people from gaining access to one of the useful methods of relaxing. Despite the aforementioned reasons why people should have their rights to make
noise
 without any restrictions, I would agree with those who believe the arguments against
noise makers
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. One of the most significant points to make is that excessive levels of
noise
 can cause serious disturbance to the nearby residents who
also
 have the right to take
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proper rest after a tiring day. Those who are affected by the loud sounds from their neighbours may not only be unable to relax but
also
 have their levels of discomfort increased. In the long term,
this
 will definitely have a negative impact on their quality of life. Another reason
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this
 opinion is that too much
noise
 can produce detrimental effects on the health of unintentional hearers.
For example
, constant exposure to high-pitched
noise
 can result in
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uditory problem
such
 as hearing loss. Hearing-impaired individuals are very likely to experience difficulties in their daily lives. In conclusion,
although
 there are good reasons why people should be allowed to make as much as
noise
 as they wish, it is in my opinion that some appropriate controls are necessary.
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