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whether it is possible to take a vacation from your problems.

#vacation
In the modern world
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the stress rates
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 increased
subtantialtly
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substantially
. Despite that people
posses
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 more leisure and incomes rather than the past , dealing with problems continue to be a barrier to find
hapiness
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happiness
 for many people. In order to maintain a balance between real life and problems
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it is
higly
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highly
 recommended that people take a
break
 about their
overwholmed
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overwhelmed
 situations in a
way
 to take a big picture of the struggling issues and not take
this
break
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don't
done
 being the
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 of the scene. Vacations, trips and parties are
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nteresting
manner
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 to take a breath about daily
stuffs
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. All of these panoramas involver similar people's feelings
such
 as
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happiness
, cheerful and free - stress.
this
 can
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 to many people who
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don't
 how
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eal with their problems because allow a space where people forget their problems in
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irst instance and
also
 allow
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o see the
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situation
 with perspective. Indeed, many couples who are struggling with problems about their relationships ensure that take vacation
such
 as a road trip or buy fly tickets help to them to think more conscious about what they want and how can they get them. When people take a
break
 from the daily routine as well , it a big opportunity to look
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the issues in another
way
.
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,
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 situation depends
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 each person because some people take
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acation from their problems as a habit and they believe that forgetting their worries these do not exist.
this
 case is
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highly
 studied for
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edical professional who proved that teenagers are more sensible and have difficulties to deal with bad
scenaries
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scenarios
sceneries
.
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, it is more common than teenagers travel with their friends and enjoy parties in a
way
 to
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don't
 talk about their problems. In conclusion, problems are part of
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human life. In
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ifferent stage of our life will be struggling with issues. the alternative to take a vacation could be
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 depending
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the focus and the intention that people have it. If people take a
break
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 and meditate how
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ackle their problems, that can
be help
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.
However
, if people take the
break
 in a
way
 to forget their uncomfortable situations does not have too much sense because their problems continue to exist. It is
higly
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highly
 recommend that somebody that has
dealing
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 with a
badly
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 situation change their location for a couple
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days to have space and time to think about how could
to
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tackle their issues.
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