Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Every
country
has its own museums or galleries, though the people have to pay for visiting some of these, some allow
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ree visit. These fees have some advantageous side
such
as it enriches the economy of the
country
and
also
help to maintain the
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, while the disadvantages are that people do not visit these areas often and the artefacts can be destroyed without
maintainance
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maintenance
expense.
Firstly
, the entry fees of these museums and galleries aid to increase the revenue of the
country
.
In other words
, people pay an
amount
to
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enter
into these places which are added to the national income which helps the economy.
Secondly
, these tickets money can be used to maintain the artworks or sculptures to preserve these from getting
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destroyed
.
For instance
, nearly 40% of the
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maintenance
cost of the National Museum of Bangladesh comes from the entrance fee paid by
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visitors.
On the other hand
, one demerit for paying admission to these places can be that poorer people of the
country
might not be able to pay the price
that is
a negative aspect for the nation as a large
amount
of the population are deprived
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knowing about their
country
.
Secondly
, if a certain
amount
of fee is not availed by the general people, it will become difficult for the government to pay for the
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maintenance
cost
thus
, the artefacts will ruin eventually. In my opinion, there should be a minimum
amount
of price fixed for all to enter into these venues by the government, so that neither the galleries are affected nor the people are deprived of visiting these locations. To conclude, despite
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some drawbacks, the advantages of paying to get admission to these meaningful areas outweigh and there should be a minimum payment fixed for everyone.
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