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Education, which occupied almost a quarter of governmental budget

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The two pie charts illustrate the percentage of
government
 spending across nine categories in the years 2000 and 2010. Overall, the budget of all areas, excepts welfare and borrowing, has been cut out.
However
, education remained the most significant segment of
government
 expenditure in both represented years. In comparison, transport, culture and leisure and ‘other’ have had the smallest budget over the period. Education, which occupied almost a quarter of
government
 spending in 2000, fell to 21
percent
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 in 2016. Spending on healthcare, defence, transport and culture and leisure
also
 decreased significantly, with the transport budget declining by two thirds. Spending on interest on borrowing accounted for 3
percent
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 of
government
 expenditure in 2000 and experienced a more than twofold increase in one-tenth in 2010. Transport made up 8
percent
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 of
government
 expenditure in 2000 and had a steady growth of 5
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 in 2010.
In contrast
, spending on the pensions section remained constant in both years at 19
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