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In many countries, people have health problems because they choose to live in unhealthy ways. What do you think the reasons for this and how can be solved?

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Nowadays, people's mundane lifestyle contributes to various
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 issues. There myriad reasons
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 problem.
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 with, people's attitude towards their
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 has changed drastically over the years, many people put their
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 before their own well-being.
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, in Japan, statistics show an average person spend over 18 hours of his day at his
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. The
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 culture of Japan is known to be the most competitive culture compare to the rest of the world. Japanese men spend their most of
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 at
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, sometimes to extent of overworking themselves to death. It has become common in Millenials to prioritize their profession over their mental and physical well-being.
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ong commute to
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 can take a toll on people's
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, in the recent study indicates that an average Pakistani spent over 2 hours in commute from its home to
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 results in huge traffic jams around the city, people spending most of their precious
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 on the road
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 of using that
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 productively.
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 results in people suffering from
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 issues like obesity as they are not able to get much movement in their body.
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, Our eating habits have drastically changed over-
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, with people giving more
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 at their workplace, leaves them with less to no
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 to prepare home-cook food.
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, a person spending the whole day at the office will be left with no energy to cook a meal, so naturally
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he will prefer to take away food which is high sugar and starch.
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, our lives have become much busier than has a direct effect on our body. to counter
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 issue, the best way is to strive a healthy lifestyle balance.
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, if a person should only
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 for his agreed-upon shift hours. He should find a good balance between his
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 and family life. People should put
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ocus on their physical
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, try to get to at least an hour of walk to their neighbourhood will be sufficient enough to de-stress themselves.
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 but not the least, Pre- prepare their meals, plan their week menu and pre-plan their meals and try to incorporate nutritious food in their diet. To summarize,
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 is very important, without our good
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 we are not capable of doing anything, we should focus on their lifestyle and being healthy
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 of earning living. If we are not in good
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, no money can make up for it.
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