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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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uture of every country. Nowadays study abroad is a common phenomenon everywhere in the world. Students from various countries travel around the world for a study. It has some advantages and drawbacks. Today developing Asian countries like India & China has a
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 amount of students population. Many students prefer
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it is often seen that
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such
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 many times added valuable strength for their future. Students do believe great currier is based on the educational qualification.
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 a valuable qualification ensures them a quality life. A great currier help to improve their as well as their family's standard of living. Developing and underdeveloped area of the world always struggle hard for basic necessities. Students who do study in
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ifferent country has maximum chances of immigration which allow them to shift from low-density area with comparatively to less competition.
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 students needs to live separate from their family. Separation from family for a specific period of time may break down their financial & mental condition. Sometimes they successfully complete education and return to their home and soon realised due to different pattern their skillset is not matching with
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ob in their local area. Normally
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 a course has expensive fees structure which added an extra burden to their life.
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 like they learn how to handle a small group of people but they may face a problem to handle more people on
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