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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read, whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online reading materials
  • printed materials
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • technology
  • convenience
  • interactivity
  • accessibility
  • visual appeal
  • physical books
  • parental guidance
  • digital skills
  • screen time
  • learning experience
  • personal preference
  • comprehension
  • critical thinking
  • creativity
  • word recognition
  • grammar
  • vocabulary development
  • reading habits
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