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Some people believe that school children should be asked to work individually in class. Others believe that working in small groups is better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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That every student in school should carry out his daily work by himself without depending on others and avoid working in groups is a subject which provokes enthusiasm as well as stark opposition, and at times the two become somewhat blurred. There are strong arguments on both sides of the debate, which we will discuss here. On the one hand, those who consider
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ndividual study to be a positive development say that it can provide students with a number of features, ranging from becoming self-dependent to broadening the horizons of knowledge to becoming more competitive.
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uture life as they do not have to depend on others. Recent developments in
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ducation system in terms of cracking entrance exam by
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students
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 to get admitted in reputed universities seem to bear testimony to
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 children how to work as a team which could be more helpful for their future career.
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, a prominent team lead can be attributed to the fact that he has the qualities to coordinate with team members and handle everything smoothly.
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they think
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 by studying in groups that pupils can learn the moral value of helping others without any mean cause. Overall, it appears to me that the stronger argument is in favour of allowing the students to study individually, with all the advantages of becoming
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 and facing challenges in life. After all, to survive in
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