Review the book "In Valeria's shoes" by Elisabeth Benavent.

Valeria's
shoes
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is the first novel of Elisabet Benavent. Valeria is the main character of
this
book
. She has three inseparable friends, Irene, Maria and Laura. The
book
describes how the four of them try to find love
while
they are trying to
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in their profession in the
competitve
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competitive
market in Madrid. The main plot is about Valeria. She is a married young woman
that
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who
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wants to become a writer.
However
, she is not happy in the marriage and she meets Sergio, a sexy
arquitec
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architect
that will make her turn her life upside down. Elisabet has been able to tell us a fun
story
to which we can all young
girl
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girls
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relate
to
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apply
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. It is fresh, funny and entertaining. Some of my classmates have read the
book
but contrary to my opinion, they
didnt
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didn't
like the
story
. They found the
book
predictable and boring.
In addition
, they think that the
story
is a copy of the
well known
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TV series,Sex in the
city
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. In
this
book
also
there are multiple sex
scene
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scenes
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of the character and all
women
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the women
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would
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discuss
they
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their
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experiences
between
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with
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them. In conclusion, despite the
rememberance
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remembrance
to
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of
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the New York series, I think that Elisa=bet has managed to create a vivid and natural
story
.
Thus
,
this
is not aiming to be a literature masterpiece. The intention of the author is to write a
book
that you can read anytime even when you
dont
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don't
have the
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to think too much.
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sentence structure
Try to vary your sentence structures more to enhance readability and interest. Incorporate a mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences.
depth analysis
Consider expanding on how the book's themes or characters might resonate with its audience, providing a deeper analysis rather than just summarizing the plot. This can enrich your review.
balance argument
While introducing the opposing viewpoint from your classmates adds depth to your review, ensure to balance it with more detailed reasoning behind your own viewpoint to make your argument more compelling.
spelling syntax
Keep an eye on minor spelling or syntax errors such as 'arquitec' should be 'architect', 'rememberance' should be 'resemblance', and 'Elisa=bet' likely intended as 'Elisabet'. These small errors can slightly distract the reader, but their impact on your overall argument is minimal.
introduction
You effectively introduced the book, its main characters, and main plot, which laid a good foundation for your review.
conclusion
Your conclusion succinctly wraps up your viewpoint, providing a clear final assessment of the book.
viewpoints
The personal and contrasting viewpoints add a nice depth to the essay, making it more engaging and comprehensive.

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