In many countries the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those cause?

The line graph reveals the effect of mental
illness
in senior citizens in England in the span of 45 years. Overall, it can be seen that the trends of mental
illness
were upward till reform took place in 1995, after that it started declining throughout two decades. It is important to note that males at
age
of 60-64 were highly affected by
this
illness
in the initial five years. It was almost 14% in 1970 to 20% in 1975.
Also
, in 1976, the incident of
illness
inclined gradually till 1986,
then
it was a sharp increase in the incident in 1986-1995. They reached a peak in 1995 with 30%.
On the other hand
, men of
age
65-69 were the least affected with
this
, but the effects started to rise gradually in 1971-1980. After 1980, there was a sharp increase in the effects. They grew almost 20% in
this
decade against 5% in the previous one.
However
, there was a sharp and gradual increase in the effects
age
of 55-59 males. After the reform, the effect of
illness
plummeted drastically in 65-69
age
males. It fell by 20% to 1% in 2000. Whereas, the incident of
illness
fluctuated rapidly in 60-64
age
group till 2015. In the case of 55-59, it dropped gradually since 1995.
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