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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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We are living in an era where internet is an essential part of life and online purchasing of goods and commodities is now
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life for people. There are certainly some advantages as well as disadvantages of it but in my opinion, the disadvantages are not that significant to outweigh the advantages of the said issue. I will be tackling my position in
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everyday necessities online are quite many. One of which is the convenience of no longer having the hassle of going to the merchandise store to buy the items needed and
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 happening worldwide with regards to the
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 pandemic. Countries imposed strict guidelines about how we deal with people socially and
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ask at all times when outside as well as only limited individuals are allowed inside the store. Another advantage is the enormous selling platforms giving you unlimited options to choose and compare items and choose the best before making the purchase. I,
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is an avid fan of online food delivery and I find it very convenient as I do not usually cook all the time.
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materials from the internet has some disadvantages that cannot be denied. One of them is the possibility of your private bank information being hacked by hackers because you are exposing it by placing your secret bank details when buying through credit card or debit card. And
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unauthorized transactions and it is a horrific incident. One option to prevent you from exposing your bank details is to choose the cash on delivery which is another choice of payment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • time-saving
  • wide selection
  • competitive prices
  • discounts
  • accessibility
  • global marketplace
  • availability
  • fraud
  • scams
  • lack of
  • physical interaction
  • personal experience
  • impersonal
  • customer service
  • delays
  • delivery
  • return process
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