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These days, children tend to spend a great deal of time playing computer games. Some believe this is a beneficial trend while others think it is detrimental.Which viewpoint do you agree with?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People like to play games from early ages, but
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 more children would love to play computer games.
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. Various studies suggest us, in
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ajority of
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dolescent in a day. In,
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 era that’s a dying trend. As
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 many young ones spend hours in front of their PC, their physical movement is directly affected
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hair for almost all day will definitely affect their posture and may
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 to muscle problems in future, sometimes they are so busy
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playing
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ame they even forgot to eat.
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 will ruins. If
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ame room with
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tranger they would not able to start
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onversation because for them
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 hard. Continually, with
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 they are going to like the virtual world in which they spend their most of
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 and after that
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, for them to engage with
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 real world is like a big hurdle to conquer. In the conclusion
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I would like to wrap up
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riend, rather
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