These days, children tend to spend a great deal of time playing computer games. Some believe this is a beneficial trend while others think it is detrimental.Which viewpoint do you agree with?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

People like to play games from early ages, but

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more children would love to play computer games.

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present scenario electronic computer games account of a high chunk proportion of their

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dolescent in a day. In,

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essay we will discuss the various negative aspects in which their health or life affected. Every parent would love to watch their children playing some kind of sports in fields, but now in

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era that’s a dying trend. As

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many young ones spend hours in front of their PC, their physical movement is directly affected

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hair for almost all day will definitely affect their posture and may

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to muscle problems in future, sometimes they are so busy

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ame they even forgot to eat.

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someone is sitting in

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tranger they would not able to start

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onversation because for them

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hard. Continually, with

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they are going to like the virtual world in which they spend their most of

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real world is like a big hurdle to conquer. In the conclusion

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I would like to wrap up

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essay by saying that parents should need to consider the adverse effect of electronic gaming on their offspring health and encourage them to go outside, play with

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creen.