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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Today the trend of online study is way more popular than ever. Now, we
seen
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saw
have seen

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 that there is
s
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a

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urge in the educational institutes which provide various study material online.
This
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 topic is
debateable
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debatable

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. In
this
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 essay we will discuss the various good aspects of
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 issue and why it may be bad on some fronts which we need to consider. As
,
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apply

It appears that you have an unnecessary comma after the subordinating conjunction As. Consider removing the comma.

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 the reach of internet increases in these past two decades with
this
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 the number of universities provide online classes shoot up. The best example for
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 one is the current going pandemic,
m
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the

It appears that an article is missing before the word majority. Consider adding the article.

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ajority of students would like to learn from home, and it is beneficial in many ways like, they can choose their own schedule.
Moreover
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, the money spent on accommodation and time on transport
also
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 save. The teacher can handle more students because they are not going to limit with classroom seats.
However
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,
on the contrary
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,

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase on the contrary. Consider adding a comma.

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if
some one
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someone

The word some one seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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 doesn’t have access to a better internet
then
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 their study will be going to affect. Continuously, in some of the courses the students need a powerful machine to run different kind of software which is very costly and not every-one have that kind of money, that will halt the learning process of
s
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the
a

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tudent. As
,
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apply

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 there is no classroom in some cases the growth of student alleviate which is due to less interaction with
other
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others

It appears that other is not correct in this context. Consider changing it.

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 in
c
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the

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lassroom.
Hence
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, in conclusion
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,

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I want to like to say that,
this
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 is a good approach, but universities should help their students by providing scholarship or rebate so, they can afford the equipment they need for their studies.

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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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