Money should be spent on creating new public buildings, such as museums and town halls, rather than renovating existing ones. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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to new facilities, people hold different views. An army of people reckons that government should
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oney to make more high buildings like museum or town halls
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surviving things. From my perspective, I partly agree with
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statement for many convincing reasons. On the one hand, there are several reasons why the authorities should focus to invest
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new
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and foremost, creating new museums will bring many profits for the image of a country. Namely, based on the big number of traveller
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visiting every single year, the museums not only have stable expends to maintain acts but
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help to advanced culture and
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of that country to visitors.
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ecessary thing to
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up the quality of
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among authorities of many countries. It will contribute an important
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for national benefit.
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, the government
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attention to repair and replace older ones.
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, towards the
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which built for a long time with backward facilities, it should
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and fixed to serve for different demands.
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,
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overnment should
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more promotion about jobs to encourage the staffs stayed at their former workplace to
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avoid
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forces if they want to leave to
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etter working environment. So, investment to improve older public building is really vital. In summary, for what
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been mentioned above, it can be affirmed that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • evolving
  • aspirations
  • incorporate
  • accessibility
  • catalyst
  • economic development
  • heritage
  • conserves
  • cultural
  • integrity
  • operational inefficiencies
  • sustainably
  • repurpose
  • throwaway culture
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental degradation
  • context-specific
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