Stress-related illness are becoming increasing common. what do you think are cause of this?What solutions can you suggest?

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People are increasing sickness because of
stress
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sickness including working long hours and
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pressure and will
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the solutions to
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problem including
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-life balance and
diet
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. People are working for long hours than before.
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, they have more
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pressure.People
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ong hour because of high competition in
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T department, R&D department is very high competitive so people
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ong hour to prove themselves.To get grow people has to
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more and
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onger hour.
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results in mental and physical suffering because they have to
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overtime and have to
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more. In order to reduce the
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illness,people should
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imited period of time and they should focus on their
diet
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and workout along with family.People need to set up their priorities in their life including family,
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, health and
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should
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accordingly
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, for some people family, health and
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all are of same priorities so they will give time to their families , their
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and
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out along with
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which would help in reducing mental and physical sickness. In conclusion, in today's life
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people are more prone to
stress
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pressure causes
the
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stress
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.And
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work life-balance
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and
diet
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leads to get relief to the
stress
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