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Computers are being used more and more in education and some say there will soon be no role for the teacher in education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In XXI century IT technologies developing rapidly
that
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computer
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computers
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 take
a
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place in
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education
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the education
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system
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and
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in
near
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the near
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future
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 most people can use
in
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them in
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 learning
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system
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systems
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 and replace
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teachers. I disagree
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this
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 , because children can not fully understand
topic
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the topic
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 without
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teacher
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a teacher
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. But if when teaching they teach how to
self learn
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self-learn
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 there is can be a chance to change online
education
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.
Current
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 time there is a
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 information that youngsters can not memorize and analyze ,
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 they cannot absorb data without
pedagogue
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a pedagogue
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.
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 , especially
students
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of
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 1 grade who can not read and write more need
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teacher
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a teacher
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. Writing and reading
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main
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the main
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 skills that play
role
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a role
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 in
further
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 , if
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teacher
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the teacher
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do
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 not explain it , to child will
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 harder to understand other things .
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, because of
coronavirus
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the coronavirus
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students
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 must learn online ,
while
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 children
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 secondary school have
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apply
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difficulty
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 online learning and
government
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the government
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give
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 access
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1 to grade
student
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students
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 learn at school but by saving safety.
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Education
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The education
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system
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 of
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 time
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a
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data about all subjects but forgets about
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the skill
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skill
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skills
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 that
need
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needs
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a student
the student
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student
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students
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 to learn.
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if
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abilities like
a
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memorization , critical thinking,
creativity
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and creativity
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 mostly teach to 1 to
4 grade
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4-grade
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students
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 after they can
self learn
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self-learn
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 and
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teacher
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the teacher
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 plays
role
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a role
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to show
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in showing
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 direction what
learn
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learning
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.
Also
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, if explain
functions
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the functions
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 of computers for
a
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searching and self
leaning
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learning
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 as the result student can learn themselves with
global
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a global
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 network. In conclusion, today children can not learn without teachers , but if
change
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the
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 teaching
system
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 to in
first
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the first
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 years of learning
develop
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to develop
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 skills like memorization , critical thinking,
creativity
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and creativity
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 and
beneficially
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benefits
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 using computer functions ,
students
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 can learn themselves
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by changing
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 to online
education
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 and teachers will show only direction.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your main argument in the introduction and support it with clear examples throughout the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Break down your ideas into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single point. This helps the reader follow your argument more easily.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally' to connect your ideas and make the structure clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid long sentences, as they can make understanding more difficult. Shorter sentences can help your points stand out.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion that is presented in the introduction, which is good for task achievement.
task achievement
You acknowledge the importance of teachers and the need for skill development in education, which shows thoughtful consideration of the topic.
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