Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some people suggest that saving disappearing languages are not
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mart investment of politicians, others say that leaders need to focus on saving cultures in extinction. I agree with both opinions,
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my view on
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to become a main goal of governments. On the one hand, protecting disappearing languages is
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right thing to do. Languages in extinction are usually ancient ways of communication that did not survive an invasion of other cultures, politics or languages. A sad example would be my mother tongue- Kazakh language. Having roots in Turkic languages, Kazakh language has been rapidly developing until the
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period of the Soviet Union. Whilst nomads were being settled in one place, not only the language was lost, but practising Kazakh culture was under a ban. Whilst, the nation
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(?) technologically developing, the deep connection and self-identity
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being disappeared. I think it is a responsibility of the government to protect the minority groups to preserve their languages.
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, focusing all the resources on saving certain languages can not save us from the problems we are going to face in foreseeable future.
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ruining our planet. The main reason
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carbodioxine effect is based on a single habit of driving a car. Prioritizing nature's condition must be the governments'main focus. Overall, saving the languages that are dying can help a certain group of people to reconnect with their history and culture,
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concentrating only on that can not help us to save our planet. The government should take other problems like global warming and the usage of traditional energy sources like fossil fuels more seriously.
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