Some people think that one should plan detailed activities for their leisure time, while others disagree with this view. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

A section of society often argued that
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people should propose a well-organised plan for their past-
time
activities;
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some experts have a different opinion. I am a strong advocate of the former approach because if the masses construct a detailed structure of their
leisure
activities,
then
they can utilize their vacant
time
well.
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both arguments in detail with
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relevant
examples. On the one hand, through developing a properly
leisure
activity
chart
, individuals can utilize their free
time
efficiently.
In other words
, the public can perform their
leisure
tasks
such
as playing sports, book reading, shopping, and watching
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ovie on
time
without
last
minute hustle.
As a result
, inhabitants can overcome daily stress levels and perform office work with
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resh mind.
For example
, the latest survey by "The Times of India" reveals that 50% of the public who organise their
leisure
tasks well, they achieve
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in their life.
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Therefore
, to be successful, masses must adapt a well-structured activity
chart
.
On the other hand
, some
conservationalist
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conservationist
conservationists
proposed that the masses can enjoy well without fixing the
time
of free
time
activites
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activities
. Unschedule programs
such
as surprise visit to relatives or a travelling journey can provide far more fun and enjoyment than a fixed
secheduled
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scheduled
schedule
program.
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,
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latest poll by " Oxford University" claims that 40% of the populace prefer
an unscheduled free
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unscheduled free time activities
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time
activities than a fixed
leisure
programs
chart
for sake of thrill and enjoyment.
Hence
, the masses sometimes secure
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unexpected happiness with
this
practice. Conclusively, In my opinion, an individual with
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ixed
chart
of vacant
time
actions may achieve more professional success and live a
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prosperous
family life. It has
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been
obseved
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observed
that the public often
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with their favourite programs due to lack of
time
.
Therefore
, if the general public
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methodology,
then
they can live a stressful life without any sorrow.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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