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It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same . Do you think the advantages of changes outweigh the disadvantages?

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A change in the everyday lifestyle is a prevailing improvement to humans lives.
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 the main avail is that people will gain knowledge of how to tackle a problem and to change according to while on the other side it is seen as running away matter from problems. In my opinion, going for a change is far better than avoiding it and remaining in the same place.
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, deterioration from situations which can cause detrimental influence on human cognitive behaviour is important rather than clinging on to it till you find a proper solution. In the current competitive world, many people face problems since they have to work under mental stress due to
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 occurrence to illustrate, psychological diseases has significantly increased
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 as anxiety, depression, and bipolar syndrome,
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, the psychologist has reasoned
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 to be a consequence of overthinking on a stressful factor,
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 can be avoided by having a clear image on the concept of moving on from an unfaithful situation. On the flip side, running away from a problem is considered to be a huge disgrace to the self-confidence. In spite, of avoiding the issues people try to dig deep and to find solutions to overcome the complications, for an instance, due to the ego factor people tend to develop mitigating a number of personal relationships with people to be on the safe side. Even though people tend to get rid of issues but they try to save their self-respect. To sum up, it is thought by many people avoiding problematic situations and moving to a different environmental phase to gain a peaceful mind is beneficial while the biggest fall down is losing self-respect. In my opinion, having a peaceful mind is one of the basic fundamental need of human beings having
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 outweighs the disadvantages.
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