Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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With the development of technology, people have
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longer lifespan and have more elderly people in society. Nowadays, the elders are usually taken
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or nursing homes,
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of their relatives. While I believe that there are some benefits, I think that it
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has drawbacks. Good
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have more benefits because the environment is much suitable for the elder. The
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has professional facilities to take
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as wheelchairs and disability toilets.
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, they can fit the elder’s needs.
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will have activities and lessons to make the elder strengthen their body and exercise their brain.
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, the elder people can company with each other. They look like a big family in the
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. They can talk to and look after each other.
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, there are some drawbacks to it. If the
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did not have professional
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workers, the elders would have been looked after with bad situations.
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, some workers will abuse or hit the elders.
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, as there are many elders in the
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, they cannot be taken
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comprehensively. So, if there are some situations that happened, they are not able to find the situation immediately.
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, some elder people will have mental problems for many reasons.
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, they may think they are abandoned by their children or some of them prefer living alone. All in all, those may put the elder in more dangerous situations. When more and more elder people are looking after by
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, there are some positive and negative influences at the same time.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In a nutshell
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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